perhaps you’re referring to your unconscious self here, that connects through your dreams…
My critique is as follows, take it with a grain of salt,
Overall, you should refrain from rambling about many things. You should try to convey to resonate with the audience that is going to read what you write. It doesn’t need to sound good, it should feel good or bad. Although, there is a lot to think about, but it’s very specific. It doesn’t feel good, and it neither feels dreadful. It seems glorified at best, the experience itself doesn’t seem to be true rather than the writer’s inspiration towards a lucid state.
Thanks for giving me the opportunity to read a critical piece of poetry.
Stay Blessed & Stay Safe 🕊️